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School teachers are more responsible for the social and intellectual development of students than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that school teachers have major roles in the social and mental
development
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 of their students compared to the parental role. While teachers contribute to the
development
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 of the students in many ways, I believe that the responsibility is held within the hands of parents to improve the social and intellectual growth of their children. Admittedly, teachers are important for the
development
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 of their students. On one hand, they teach them manners and discipline, including how to be a part of a team and how to properly communicate with others. School plays,
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, are a perfect activity for students, in which they work together to present good shows.
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, lessons discussed in class can enhance the children’s executive functions. Teachers can
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 raise debates among students to discuss information in order to build their logical and critical thinking.
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, I believe that parents are mainly responsible for the social and cognitive growth of their children. Regarding social relationships, children inherit some of the characteristics of their parents, and they usually imitate their
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 in different situations.
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, if one of the parents is violent and aggressive with others, it is most likely that the child will inherit these traits and could be violent while playing or with other friends. As for the intellectual
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, children learn
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 from their parents as young as the age of months, and they know how to speak and use their senses from them. If the parental role was not apparent at early stages, children may lose their ability to learn and communicate. In conclusion,
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 teachers are an important factor for the
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 of social and intellectual skills in students, I believe that the parental role is much more crucial.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nuances
  • responsibility
  • intellectual development
  • social development
  • structured learning environment
  • curriculum
  • diverse interactions
  • group activities
  • conflict resolution
  • foundational impact
  • core values
  • beliefs
  • attitudes
  • nurturing
  • joint responsibility
  • collaboration
  • continuous dialogue
  • distinct roles
  • underestimate
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