The youth in many countries are unemployed and unskilled, where at the same time, the military services are in need of people. Compulsory military service is beneficial and necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer, and include any revelent examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

The issue of whether the teenagers must join the essential
army
service or not is certainly a controversial topic. Despite some people argued that it is pros outweighed cons.I personally disagree with that. The following examples will illustrate my point of views.
Firstly
, based on the economic value
,
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,
army
facilities can be replaced human
beings not
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beings, not
only for the duration of function but
also
the expanse. In one word, it can
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the demands of people.
For example
,
government
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the government
can purchase the high-tech tank or automatic weapon which is controlled by machine and they can be operated properly more than a real human being.
In addition
, a well-trained
army
takes around 3 to 5 years to finish their training while the automatic weapon can be operated right after we purchased it.
Moreover
, citizens need to pay for a well-trained
army
salary until he passes away. In my opinion
,
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,
I would like to pay tax for long-term used facilities rather than an
army
.
Secondly
, I generally believe that teenagers should attend schools to acquire knowledge
instead
of join military. As like the topic mentioned about, most of the children in the world are without occupations and talents for employment and
join
fit as if by joints
joint
military cannot provide them a well education to gain more practical skills to find a proper job.
For instance
, a study showed that a teenager who joined
military
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the military
did not acquire any general knowledge while the others who went to school obtained a numerous skill from
educational center
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educational centres
educational centre
and they found a proper job afterward. It goes without saying that joining the compulsory military service for children is not beneficial for them,
instead
, it is a somewhat negative. In summary, I once again reaffirm my position that I disagree necessary military activity is
positive
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positively
and essential for teenagers.
On the contrary
, I believe that it is not an appropriate way to do so based on economic value and the importance of education for youth.
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