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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this.

#controls #media #attitudes #people
: In some countries the media is controlled exclusively by large companies; in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 it is the government that has
this
control
. Often, in
war situation
Suggestion
a war situation
war situations
the war situation
, one of the
first
 casualties is the media, which is seized by one group or another.
This
 gives some support to the idea that the media is a source of power and
control
. Whoever controls the media
also
 has ultimate
control
 over what is published or broadcasted and what is omitted. They can
also
 add a certain prejudice or bias to their coverage of certain news stories depending on their own feelings about the matter.
This
 is not a new problem,
although
 the issue is perhaps more pressing now that the Internet and play-TV
have enabled
Suggestion
has enabled
 these messages to be disseminated even
further
.
However
, we should remember that readers have their own ideas and opinions. You can
control
 what is
printed but
Accept comma addition
printed, but
 you cannot
control
 the opinions of your readers. I think the only positive here is that, nowadays, people seem to be much more cynical about what they read in the press or hear on the television.
In particular
, when it comes to the tabloid press, people know that they have to take what they read with a grain of salt.
In other words
, they read knowing they may be being lied to. Perhaps it is even greater concern that we have become so accepting of
this
 form of censorship. The only thing that can be done to alter
this
 situation is for the government to regulate the industry so that there is no longer a monopoly on media ownership.
This
also
 means that they have to allow and support a totally free press, even if
this
 means the government may be criticised or ridiculed within its pages.
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