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In many cities today, most people live in large apartment blocks. Does this kind of accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages?

#cities #people #apartment #blocks #accommodation
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Majority
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The majority
 of the citizens in cities across the country are willing to opt for life in high
rise
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apartment
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 buildings rather than small individual houses.
This
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 essay will
through
propel through the air
throw
 some light on both advantages and disadvantages and provides an opinion.
Firstly
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, the life in
large
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a large apartment building
apartment
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 building has considerable advantages like better city planning and makes maintenance of the community
easy
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easier
. A recent study shows the city has to grow in vertical rather than horizontal to avoid the long distance travels and high maintenance.
For instance
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, a 20 acres land can cater 2000 families altogether, if the high
rise
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 apartments are built. Whereas, it needs more than 100 acres of land to build individual houses.
Secondly
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, high
rise
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apartment
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 culture is more safe and secure as the responsibility is taken up by the community welfare association.
Also
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, it exposes children
for
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to
from
 other cultures and traditions to analyse and understand the society faster.
For example
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, different age group of people
come
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comes
 together to spend
times
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time
 by participating in their respective area of
intrests
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interests
interest
 like outdoor sports, swimming, parks and
jagging
running at a jog trot as a form of cardiopulmonary exercise
jogging
 tracks, as all these amenities are being built as part of the community offering.
On the other hand
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,
this
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 culture
also
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 has its own demerits like creating water scarcity and increase in pollution. As discussed,
more number
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a number
number
the number
 of families can be
accomodated
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodated
 in
lesser landscape area
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a lesser landscape area
the lesser landscape area
lesser landscape areas
, leads to scarcity of water supply as it consumes more ground water.
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moreover
in addition
Moreover
, pollution increases beyond normal levels as the area gets
densified
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. In conclusion, life in high
rise
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apartment
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 block has more advantages over disadvantages.
However
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, in my opinion, the disadvantages can overcome with better strategies.
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