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Nowadays, more and more people are having consumer goods like refrigerators and washing machines. Does this development bring more advantages than disadvantages?

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With the development of new technologies, people’s life is now more comfortable than it was in the past. In these days it is almost unimaginable that one modern household functions without refrigerators, washing machines, microwave oven, and other appliances. A rapid development of these technologies brings with
itself
the thing named or in question
it
 a lot of advantages, but negatively
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 these useful technological devices have on humans and
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 could not be ignored. With today’s available
consumer
 goods, people do not have much trouble to keep their foods or clothes in the condition that will be useful for them in every occasion. Time spent in preparation of food, washing or ironing of clothes, is far less these days than it used to be in the past, and thanks to new technologies. Just
hundred years
Suggestion
a hundred years
 ago it was unimaginable that you could keep your meats and other food items for months, to prepare some meals in just a couple of minutes or to wash a large number of clothes in just 30 minutes.
That is
 the biggest advantage of these
consumer
 goods, Modern people spend far less time in doing house chores than they used to. In
this
 way, people can save time, and time is the most valuable aspect
in
Suggestion
of
 the modern society. But,
on the other hand
, use of appliances in
such
 huge quantity brings with
itself higher
Accept comma addition
itself, higher
it higher
it it higher
energy
 consumptions that lead to a higher environmental pollution all around the world. Since most of our
energy
 is produced from the fossil fuels and coals,
further
 increasing of
energy
 consumption will lead to greater consumption of these non-renewable resources of
energy
 which harm our environment. Even today the Earth is on the highest level of pollution in its history. So it is understandable why people warn on use and overuse of
consumer
 goods. At the end, modern appliances are invented to make people’s life easier and they are successful in that, but the question is- 'what cost it will
bound
Suggestion
bind
 us to pay?' I am sure that in the future these
consumer
 goods will be more
energy
 efficient with lesser
energy
 consumptions for their work, and that will still make the life of people easier and more convenient like they do today.
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