Every man has a right to proper healthcare.However,private hospitals nowadays are so profit oriented that they are distracted from providing proper healthcare facilities. In your opinion,is this profit making tendency a hindrance to proper healthcare ?

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It is true that every citizen has a right to get proper
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healthcare
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health care
facilities.
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, I understand that at present, medical science has been invented many equipment’s, machines as well as apparatus, which enhances medical
treatment
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, services and applications that are increasing
total
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the total amount
amount
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of cost in
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healthcare
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health care
organization.
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with, for giving aesthetic and worthy
treatment
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, many private oriented hospitals have to purchase various kinds of machines and materials, whose prices are very high and are needed profuse
amount
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of
money
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for
bring
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bringing
these modern tactics.
This
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types
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type
of investment
are increasing
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is increasing
total
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the total amount
amount
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of cost for patients. It can be observed that many private
hospital
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hospitals
,
moreover
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, have been
made
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making
their organization by renting
house
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a house
the house
from others, where owners have to deal many amenities with house owners. Many developing and underdeveloped countries in Asian continents,
for example
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, where many owners were
built their
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built, their
cherished hospital by making
agreement
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an agreement
agreements
in
renting process
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the renting process
. Increasing citizen facilities in
private hospital
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a private hospital
has to spend
numerous
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numerous amounts
a numerous amount
amount
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of
money
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in case of medicine, housekeeping, lighting and cooling or air condition and so on.
On the other hand
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,
rising
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the rising amount
amount
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of
money
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in
private medical sector
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the private medical sector
has had some negative impacts for
individual citizen
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the individual citizen
individual citizens
. The
first
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and most reason is that many people go to private oriented hospital for getting better medical care that they cannot get other oriented hospital’s a matter of fact, they suffer from wrong
treatment
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from desired hospital and many of them have lost their
life
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lives
by the name of
treatment
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.
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, many people lead their lives with hardship because they cannot earn lots of
money
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that is
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needed in their families.
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, the modern
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healthcare
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health care
is a
day dream
have a daydream; indulge in a fantasy
daydream
for them. In conclusion,
although
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, modern
healthcare
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amenities are very sagacious for everyone.
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, many private organizations
are oriented their
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are oriented to their
business in order to earn a lot of
money
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, but all are not same.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Universal healthcare
  • Privatization
  • Profit-driven
  • Accessibility
  • Patient care
  • Healthcare system
  • Public sector
  • Medical ethics
  • Healthcare disparities
  • Regulatory framework
  • Equitable access
  • Health insurance
  • Quality of care
  • Corporate responsibility
  • Stakeholders
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