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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In the contemporary era, usage of technology is increasing day by day. Now to do every kind of
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, machines
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 available. Presently, everyone has access to the technology and they have their personal computer and telephone which has made their life easier even if they do the
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 at
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. The benefits of doing
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 at
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 are more than its drawbacks which are
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 elaborated in the impending fragments. There are
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a plethora
 of advantages associated with the phenomenon of working at
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.
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 of all, person while working at his own place is more comfortable than working in an
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. He can sit comfortably and even he could wear relaxed clothes because in an
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 one has to wear formal clothes.
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, the individual would get healthy and fresh diet at
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 whenever gets hungry, as in the
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, he does not have
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 option and have to eat his lunch box. Apart from
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, a person could spend more time with family even while working. Discussing the same, one can
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 at any hour with his own wish, there is not any obligation to do the
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 at the given hour.
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, there are many pros of doing jobs at
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, but its cons cannot be overlooked. The big disadvantage is the distraction. One cannot properly concentrate on
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 while at
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 because there are many noises around, but if individual
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 in
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 than he could concentrate on his
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 more because everyone around him is doing their own
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 and
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 they carry responsibility to do the job in a particular hour so it brings motivation in them which is not possible while working at
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. In conclusion, there are more advantages of doing tasks at
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 than disadvantages. But these drawbacks are
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 prominent and should not be ignored
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