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Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some would argue that technological advancement has made people more sociable, while others think that it is the opposite, people is less sociable. I agree the latter statement and believe that despite recent
technology
 makes it simple to get connected with someone far away, it has made ones does not aware of surrounding people. On the one hand, it is easier to connect to strangers in remote locations. Social media,
such
 as Facebook and Twitter, has greatly facilitated people who have the same interest to meet online regardless of their geographical locations.
In addition
, they can discuss things almost everywhere, at home, at work or even when taking on a bus.
For example
, there are dozens of Facebook groups that gather people who is going to take the IELTS test so they can study together and give input to others' weaknesses. In my opinion, it is a welcomed result of recent
technology
.
On the other hand
, modern communication
technology
 has made people prefer to meet others with the same interest online rather than meeting with people of various interests in their neighbourhood. It is not difficult to find men and women who live
next
 to one another do not know each others because most of the time they are busy with their online friends.
For example
, many Instagram's celebrities in Indonesia are not known to their neighbours because they rarely appear in public places. In my opinion, it is condemned impact of modern
technology
. In conclusion, despite the
technology
 has made it easier for men and women to see each other over the Internet, it has impacted many local societies negatively because people who live nearby do not know each others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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