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Some people think that all the lawbreakers should be taken into the prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives. (for example, doing some work or learning some skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People are always arguing how to punish a person who broken the
law
.
some
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Some
 citizen
suggest
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suggests
 to put in prison,
however other
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however, other
 say it may be other ways to treat the
law
 breaker by having some good services from them. From my
perspective it
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perspective, it
 may have other alternatives to handle lawbreakers in
good
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a good way
the good way
good ways
way
. One
way
 people are suggesting that convicts always have a prison for
there
of them or themselves
their
 actions. If they did highly bed
think
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thinking
 like robbery or murder it may be some
bed
that which is below standard or expectations as of ethics or decency
bad
 situation
besides
 that
crime
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criminal
law
 should get all the information from victims and afterward they should
punished
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punish
 him. It may have some bed story
besides
 that.
However other
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However, other
 alternatives are that we can take good service from lawbreakers like to give service in
community
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the community
 or work for city or provide some good thinks to society. It may change the
persons
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person's
way
 of living. Because all time person are not allowed to do
crime
 some situations may
accore
come to pass
occur
 to do so. In
cunclusion I
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conclusion, I
conclusion I
 think whenever the
crime
 is done for some reason or some situations it shop be punished to a lawbreaker.
Otherwise
law
 can handle some
crime
 by providing some good services to
lawbreakers
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law breakers
 and
don
engage in
doing
done
do
 so for the community. There is no one
way
 of handling the lawbreakers.

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