some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Food advertisements should encourage children to have a healthy eating habits.Those who are using children movie artists and favourite cartoon characters in any advertisement should be banned. Teachers and parents should teach young people regarding creative thinking.

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of consumerism, advertisements could encourage creativity and values

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as friendship and helping nature. There are some food items which has been telecasted on televisions often have a high amount of sugar and salt, which often lead to child obesity. Children tend to pester their parents to buy them products which has shown on the media. Children have not yet learned that everything cost money and which need to be earned. Apart from

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, children get an illusion that everyone has free access to material things. Advertisements assist consumer to find out

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

170 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial responsibility
budget
save
informed spending decisions
personal preferences
practical and efficient
unwanted or inappropriate gifts
impersonal
emotional value
thoughtfulness
personal consideration
wise financial decisions
frivolously
lasting memories and experiences
educational courses
hobby-related equipment
long-lasting positive impact
fostering interests and skills

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