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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We belong to well behaved and civilised
society
, But there are differences between social mindsets of people. It is always argued that voluntary services
such
 as charity, aiding
unprivileged
 people, cleaning surroundings and
many
Suggestion
much
 more should be part of the
school
 curriculum. Well, I agree with
this
 statement and I believe it should be mandatory in every
school
. I shall
further
 discuss my supporting arguments in following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the social community service will impact children’s mind in a positive way
such
 that they understand the way of becoming responsible citizens. Not only that, they can empathise with socially backward or disable people.
For instance
, Few years back, my
school
 started educating students about the Swatch Bharat mission and it was mandatory for each student to take part. From that event, I started understanding the importance of making surrounding clean and I learned to throw rubbish in dustbin always in a lifetime.
Besides
this
, volunteer work from
school
 days adds social relations for a lifetime, which can benefit pupils in their later career process.
Moreover
, helping disabled or elderly people gives inner satisfaction and proud moment, which makes them understand the humanity and kindness. They feel returning a favour to
society
 and get the meaning of true happiness.
For example
, student who aid
at
Suggestion
in
 the elderly home would always respect their grandparents and folks.
However
, few pupils will find
this
 time as an excuse to hang out with friends and might not give hundred percent for free service to the community. To put
this
 in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that even though there are minor disadvantage of
such
 mandatory volunteer work from
school
, there are huge advantages for
society
 and the individual.
Also
, I believe it will be one step towards making perfect
society
.
Submitted by Nirbhay on

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