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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

We belong to well behaved and civilised
society
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, But there are differences between social mindsets of people. It is always argued that voluntary services
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 as charity, aiding
unprivileged
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 people, cleaning surroundings and
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much
 more should be part of the
school
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 curriculum. Well, I agree with
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 statement and I believe it should be mandatory in every
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. I shall
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 discuss my supporting arguments in following paragraphs.
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 with, the social community service will impact children’s mind in a positive way
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 that they understand the way of becoming responsible citizens. Not only that, they can empathise with socially backward or disable people.
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, Few years back, my
school
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 started educating students about the Swatch Bharat mission and it was mandatory for each student to take part. From that event, I started understanding the importance of making surrounding clean and I learned to throw rubbish in dustbin always in a lifetime.
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, volunteer work from
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 days adds social relations for a lifetime, which can benefit pupils in their later career process.
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, helping disabled or elderly people gives inner satisfaction and proud moment, which makes them understand the humanity and kindness. They feel returning a favour to
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 and get the meaning of true happiness.
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, student who aid
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in
 the elderly home would always respect their grandparents and folks.
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, few pupils will find
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 time as an excuse to hang out with friends and might not give hundred percent for free service to the community. To put
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 in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that even though there are minor disadvantage of
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 mandatory volunteer work from
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, there are huge advantages for
society
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 and the individual.
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, I believe it will be one step towards making perfect
society
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.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • neighborhood improvement
  • teaching sports
  • empathy
  • social justice
  • transferable skills
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • problem-solving
  • civic duty
  • civic engagement
  • educational enhancement
  • practical experiences
  • academic learning
  • real-world applications
  • social cohesion
  • mutual support
  • time management
  • balancing priorities
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