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Some people believe that a natural ability is needed to be successful at sport, others believe that hardwork and discipline is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Use relevant ideas and examples

#people #ability #sport #hardwork #discipline
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Both
talent
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 and hard work
is
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are
 necessary to be successful in sport.
Nowadays few
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Nowadays, few
 people
thinks
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think
 that those who are celebrities in sports either have natural ability or they do regular hard work to achieve their goal.In
this
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 essay we will discuss about both views and in the end will give
opinion
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an opinion
. Success is a crucial part in every professional
person
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's life like film star
,
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,
doctors scientist and sport
person
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.One should be talented to be successful in sports and without it can maintain their stardom
.
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With the help of luck and money you only achieve your goal once after that
talent
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 is needed to win matches in sports
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Your natural ability always takes you to the peak of your goal.
For instance
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 the famous cricket player M.S Dhoni is famous in
world
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the world
 for his natural ability and it is said if he is playing in
last
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 of any match
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 they will win the match always.People admire
alot
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a lot
 and they follow him on social media.It was his
talent
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 which
make
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makes
 him famous among people.
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Hardwork
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Hard work
 and
discipline
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 are two key to success in every one's life
.
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.
It is always said by the people
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hardwork
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hard work
 pay's off for winning.
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However it
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However, it
 is believed by people
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hardwork
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hard work
 and
discipline
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 to be popular in sports.Those sports
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person
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people
persons
 who do lots of hard work in their to achieve their had many failure stories and experiences to reach the top
.
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.
They follow their rules and regulations which helps them to plan the strategy to achieve
goal
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goals
the goal
a goal
.
For
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instance if
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instance, if
 we talk about famous Indian Bollywood actor Mr Pankaj Tiwari whose has lots of
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hardwork
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hard work
 in his life to
fullfill
put in effect
fulfil
 his dream of
actor
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acting
.He worked as
waitor
a person whose occupation is to serve at table (as in a restaurant)
waiter
,
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,
teacher and chef to collect for his acting classes. As he mentioned in his interview he struggled
alot to before
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a lot before
a lot to before
alot too before
alot too too before
 his popularity and made
strict plan
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a strict plan
 how to achieve his goal.
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Hardwork
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Hard work
 and
discipline
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makes
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make
 famous
person
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 decent
,
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,
polite and down to earth
.
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 To conclude that it is true
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hardwork
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hard work
 and
discipline
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 plays a more important role in the path of success of famous celebrity because it gives them consistency and stability in their career on contrary to
talent
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 which
last
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 but can't sustain in career point of view.

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