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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian aid during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

#nations #countries #aid #disasters
It has been argued that rich countries should help poorer ones with humanitarian aid during natural catastrophes. I agree with
this
 statement because
this
 prevents some borders’ problems and because human beings are one species. Mankind solidarity requires cooperation amongst each other. Prosperous nations should carry out their role where they assist less lucky ones. As no single civilization cab
survive
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survives
 alone
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 though it might seem they are immune to damage now
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 they must imagine what is it like if the roles were reversed.
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For
 instance, throughout history rich countries have become poor and
vise
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vice
 versa
,
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,
 like when Egypt was aiding Great Britain after the starvation and now Egypt is receiving that same help.
Furthermore
, natural disasters lead to refugee problems and
then
 borders, crises. When a less fortunate country suffers from
tragedic
an event resulting in great loss and misfortune
tragedies
 calamity, its people tend to run away towards wealthy
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
.
This
 migration
generally include
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generally includes
large number
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a large number
 of illegal
emigrants which
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immigrants, which
immigrants which
 in turn will affect the borders of these rich
countries leaving
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countries, leaving
 them with distress and big dilemma which could be avoided by humanitarian relief given at the
first
 place
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For instance
, CNN reported 1.2 million illegal immigrants to USA after the
last
 tsunami in Indonesia
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 In conclusion,
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upscale
 nations should help
povert
 countries with humanitarian aids during natural disasters to avoid
further
 borders’ problems and to unite humanity as one.

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