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Nowadays media should include more good news in there publication. Do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reason from your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge and experience.

#media #news #publication #reason
Nowdays
,
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,
Media has a major role in education and country development.People
has always influced
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have always influenced
has always influenced
 by the news
,
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,
either is is good or bad.
some
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Some
predictor
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predict or
 suggest that telecasting a
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 news has always
benefit
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benefitted
benefited
 more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 the bad news.Personally, I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that showing the bad side has more advantage
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 the good news. Time is running fast people need
to
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for
 the update their self with movement of
competitiors
the contestant you hope to defeat
competitors
competitions
 and new technology. On top of it
,
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,
People living a
stressfull
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
 life.
many
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Many
 factors are
reposible
capable of being replaced
replaceable
 for that like Hectic schedule
on
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at
of
with
 work
,
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,
family problems
,
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,
finanacial
involving financial matters
financial
 problems and many more.
Although
,
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,
people need a time for raid of them self from reduce anxiety and stress.In that situation watching some good news make them feel lighten that something in somewhere happening good.As we take
example
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an example
, Media should promote the news more regarding the
techanology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
technologies
 and sports
,
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,
As we know that both news are highly demanded in public. On
flip side
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the flip side
 of the coin
,
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,
Bad news spread the awareness about the people regarding
the theaft
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the aft
the the aft
 and
gun shot
the act of shooting a gun
gunshot
 incident that happened in the city.Media should
focused
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focus
 and promote
more of illigel
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more illegal
more of illegal
 activity as well frauds calls for pull out the money from the call
recevier
set that receives radio or tv signals
receiver
.That all News help to aware people
ffrom
a giver or sender
from
 the scam.As an example
,
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,
One of my
friend
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friends
 saw the news that many hackers ask you about your bank details and take all of your money from the bank.
In
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On
 the
next
 day he got the same call from the hackers
,
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,
asking him about the
details but
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details, but
 he refused
togive
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to give
 and
infrom
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in from
 the police about the incident and
giveall
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give all
 the
deatils
true confidential information
details
 of the call. To conclude
,
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,
Both the news
have
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has
 a good point of
view but
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view, but
 as per my knowledge bad news help to people to be aware.So, I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that media
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 have to more focused on bad news
then
 the good.

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