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some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs.Others believe there are much better benefits of university education for both individuals and society.Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #aim #university #education #graduates #jobs #individuals #society
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In the modern
society
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, the
education
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pays
participate in games or sport
plays
 an important role. That many people consider that graduate students can find
decant
socially or conventionally correct; refined or virtuous
decent
 job easily than peers without degrees.
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,
university
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education
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 brings beneficial for both individuals and
society
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. From my perspective, l will discuss
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 both standpoint of views and l will give my own opinion.
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the purpose of
university
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education
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 is helpful to find better jobs because advanced degrees are considered to have a high professional level of competence. So
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,
,
university
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 students who are easy to seek
job opportunity
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job opportunities
a job opportunity
 than Peers without degrees.
prestigious
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Prestigious
 enterprises
are
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are also caring
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education
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the education
 of
employee’s background
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the employee’s background
 in the
first
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 interview.
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It
 is important to understand that enterprise will choose to have more skill and less ordinary person.
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,
education
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 brings benefits for individuals who have the ability to increase themselves values and improve skills to face competitive
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.
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,
university
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education
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 offers students to broaden their horizons opportunities.
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such
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Such
 as students’ study in overseas
university
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. For the
society
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, many citizens
are received
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receive
education
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 which can decline illiteracy rates.
it
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 is extremely effective and
also
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 the
education
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 of students relevant to national economic developments in
society
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. In conclusion, receiving
education
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 can change our life and it is good things for
society
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. In my opinion, graduates students should be improve their ability which can easy to adapt challenges in the companies.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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