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Some people say material possessions are very useful in bringing us happiness, but others argue that they are useless in terms of providing happiness. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, life is full of enjoyment and depression. Many of the people fell happy to buy materialistic things like expensive cars, huge apartment, big
property
, gold while others feel enjoying by with their family and friends. In my point of view, I believe that purchasing money-oriented things
give
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have been given
have been giving
 happiness for some time but
such
 kind of joy is useless. In today's lifestyle, people prefer to live in single family and are not having good relations with their parents because everyone is running after money, status and name.
This
 is way, individuals are attracted towards
property
 and feel happy to buy apartments, luxurious cars. People think that they are having lots of money so they do not need anyone as they can buy anything. Individuals enter into crimes and fights because of
property
. The death of the head of the family, they try to take more
property
 of their brothers and sometimes those cases are settled by district courts On the other side, people think that belongings do not buy pleasure. Their real exhilaration stands in the good bond that they share with their blood relatives and friends and they believe that when they will be in financial problems, at that time
their
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they're
 close friends will be there to help them but not the material resources. In conclusion, in my viewpoint materialistic things can provide delightful to people for some time and
also
 destroy the relation with family members because of fame. In any emergency situations family members with you, but assets and gold will not be helping you.
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