Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Nowadays, more and more youth

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follows

an unhealthy routine, eating more junk food and playing video-games

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of doing

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physics

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-exercises. For

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reasons

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it is impossible not to be concerned. A portion of the society

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thinks

that

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problem

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should be solved by

school

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and parents and I fully agree with

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too. The

school

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has the duty to educate the students from

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the time of person's life when they are a child

childhood

onwards, so they

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have to teach them

healthcare

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health care

. To tackle the

problem

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that our society is experiencing,

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school

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the school

schools

should provide children a model to follow, making them aware of the importance of a good health. In my experience, I think that my

school

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have succeeded

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has succeeded

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because

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at primary

school

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they collaborated with an organisation, which provided us a wide range of fruit for snack time and

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at secondary

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, my teachers organised meetings with doctors, who explained us the consequences of an unhealthy lifestyle.

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hand, school

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can only inspire the youth, but only parents can control their bad habits and be strict if

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will be necessary. Thanks to parents some children do at least one sport like football, tennis or volleyball.

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, not all families can afford to pay one of

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this courses

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these courses

this course

, which use to be very expensive.

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However, there

are undoubtedly other healthy choices

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instance, taking

their sons to playground in order to make them move and unconsciously do exercises. In addiction cooking more vegs and eat less junk food is an incredible way to tackle the

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. In conclusion, I personally think that either

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side

, parents and

school

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, have a crucial

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in children's life and they are the only one capable to tackle the

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of their unhealthy lifestyle, making them healthy and conscious adults.