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Drug abuse is becoming more and more common in many countries. What are some of the problems associated with drug abuse, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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Over usage of drug is a concerning and common problem all around the world and it is quickly becoming more troublesome in many regions.
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 is truly worrisome, and considered to be one of the biggest threat humanity has to face, there are many ways to deal with its effects. Drug abuse causes many problems for many countries and communities, and one of the most obvious effects would be the massive decrease in the user’s health.
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 turn, would cause their family member to try their best to cure said user of their addiction, even if it means using expensive methods and treatments.
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, in some cases, the addiction is so severe that it would lead to certain death and
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 not only waste the money of their family members but break their heart as well. Another effect would be the increase in crime rate. People who take drugs tend to become crazy and irrational, and they can be a danger both to themselves and the people around them.
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, the threat of drug abuse can be mitigated through various methods. The
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 people would learn to stay away from them. Another plausible solution would be for the government to tighten the security around the region and eradicate any place that sell drugs they can find.
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 would most likely scare other drug-sellers and force them to stop their activities or at least rethink their decision to continue
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 business. In conclusion, while drug abuse is a serious issue all around the world and there
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 no way to stop it entirely, but these are some concrete steps that could be taken to reduce its effects.
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