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The maps compare a city prior to and after the developments of infrastructure. The pie chart, it is clear that the majority of energy is produced from petroleum products, whereas only a smaller proportion is contributed by solar panel. Tidal energy is nowhere near as productive as other sources. Mumbai used to be an industrial town, which has been undergoing a significant transformation to become a heavily residential area with many new developments. Delhi used to be a favourite destination for birds, it has undergone a significant transformation to become a heavily industrial area with many new developments. Overall, it is clear that, Mumbai was used to be a quite agriculture place, it has undergone a significant change to become a heavily industrial area with some new building. Overall, what stands out here is that commercial production of chocolate has a seven cyclic step, beginning from co
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f raw materials and ends by distributing products to the sales unit.The bee must undergo a cyclic progression of six stages to become adult or complete its life cycle. The majority of rice is produced by India, whereas Pa
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a Muslim republic that occupies the heartland of ancient south Asian civilization in the Indus River valley; formerly part of India; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
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, Sreelanken companies were nowhere near as productive as other countries’ firms.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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