In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it?

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increased drastically in many countries.

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is gradually violent in nature

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the increased crime

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introduces an alternative

lack of

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, financial challenge, social

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the environmental condition

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and use of excess social media and internet.

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, people with less

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became a criminal in many cases. Poor families where parents are thinking kids as

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making machine from

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a very young age

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the path

a path

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due to less knowledge of doing right or wrong.

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, deficiency of

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lead people to do

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as people in

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slum areas

a slum area

, who fight for food and shelter for each day, can choose

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for

money

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, friends and family of a criminal follow the same path, like

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the brother

of a criminal can’t escape to do

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, use of excessive social media and technology enhance the

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to be more violent, as communication between the criminals is a

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Facebook

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combined

effort of government and society

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Government should take steps like

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a child's education

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is mandatory in

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country irrespective financial situations

the country irrespective financial situation

a country irrespective financial situation

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Government should provide allowances to families in below average income for child care

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example countries

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example, countries

like Canada provide monthly $1000 per kid to parents having below $35000 annual income

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Everybody in society should stay alert to protect the society. In the conclusion, lack of

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education

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, social support, and affluent use of social media and

internet

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the internet

might be the reasons of gradual increase in

crime

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. It can be controlled by Government and each individual with some discipline.

Tue Nov 12 2019

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Some people say that increasing price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better, alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers ahould be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe thay should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.