9. In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from the health problem as a result of eating too much junk food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax or this kind of food.

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In today’s era, a segment of society is suffering with major
health
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problem due to consuming excessive fast
food
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. According to some people
government
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should impose higher
tax
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on these kinds of
food
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. I
am partially agreed
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have partially agreed
partially agree
with
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statement.
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essay will throw the light
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of
the statement.
Firstly
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, there is a trend of eating
junk
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food
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. People are too busy
in
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with
their work schedule and they have less time for cooking. So, they tend to buy fast
food
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.
This
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is the main reason
now a days
in these times
nowadays
people are suffering from major
health
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issues.
For instance
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, a survey conducted in Singapore and India, one of the developed countries revealed that people are compelled to buy fast
food
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because of their busy schedule. Half of the population in the countries are suffering from
health
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problems
such
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as respiratory issues, high cholesterol, kidney problem due to consumption of unhealthy
food
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.
Secondly
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, imposing higher
tax
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on fast
food
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will be
unaffordable
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for poor people only. Rather than increasing
tax
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on
junk
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food
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government
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should increase consumption of ready to eat healthy
food
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.
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, they should deplete the cost of fruits and
vegetables which
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vegetables, which
are double of the
junk
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food
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cost.
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, money which
government
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will get from imposing higher
tax
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on unhealthy would
beneficial
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benefit
for a
country
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country's
economy.
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, only lower class people will get affected
with
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by
higher
tax
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.
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In conclusion, increasing the
tax
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on
junk
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food
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will only deter lower class people. If the
government
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really want
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really wants
to reduce consumption of
junk
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food
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, there can be other solutions to get rid of
this
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problem like
health
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awareness programs and reduce the cost of healthier foods.
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