Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole.

Some people believe that it is essential to refuse to eat
meat
and
fish
for protecting our health and the world as a whole.
Although
I agree that it is not wise to eat excessive
meat
or
fish
, nature has its rules which cannot be changed by people’s eating style. For us humans, we need
meat
and
fish
to get energy that supports us to live. There are various of nutrition in the
meat
and
fish
which cannot be replaced by vegetables or fruits. Obviously, we cannot live a healthy life without
fat
a strong belief in a supernatural power or powers that control human destiny
faith
.
Besides
, nowadays most of edible
meat
comes from livestock. They are fed by farmers to provide
meat
for people, so it would not affect the balance of nature. The
nature food
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nature, food
chain would not be harmed because of our normal diet but people’s slaughtering.
However
, it is reasonable for us to eat less
meat
or
fish
within appropriate range. On the one hand, eating less
meat
and more vegetables
is
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are
beneficial to our health. We can get balanced nutrition from different kinds of food. And it is hard to say whether there are some
greed
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greedy
people who hurt the precious animals for money. If there are more people who want to eat endangered animal,
this
animal would face the risk of extinction.
Then
there will be a chain reaction which has bad effects on the world as a whole.
To
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In
conclusion, we do not need to refuse
meat
or
fish but
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fish, but
to eat them in control. Eating them within a limit is the best way to improve our health and protect the world.
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