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Some people think that public health is the responsibility of a government while others think that people should be responsible for their health. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

#people #health #responsibility #government
In
this
 modern era, sound body is necessary for human beings, if they
are not fit
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don't fit
 and fine
then
 they cannot survive in
world
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the world
.
However
, few occupants think that it is headache of regime to look after of
citizens whereas
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citizens, whereas
rest
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the rest
 of people say that dwellers should take care themselves. I will discuss both aspects in underneath paragraphs with
logical conclusion
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a logical conclusion
logical conclusions
. Predominantly, Heath is
first responsibility
Suggestion
the first responsibility
 of
government
.
Firstly
, pollution is increasing day by day in every part of the
world
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world, then
then
 how masses can take fresh air? The
government
 should install parks or
walkpath
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walk path
 in
public area
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a public area
public areas
 so that they can fit and healthy.
Additionally
, those folks who belong to
poor family
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a poor family
poor families
, cannot afford expensive treatments.
Therefore
,
government
 should preserve free treatments for them. On the other side, people should take care themselves because they know very well what is
better
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good
the good
 or bad for their health
then
 others. On the top of it, individuals should do daily exercises and have
healthy meal
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a healthy meal
instead
 of junk food.
Consequently
, they can look after themselves and they
don not need of
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don not need
 medicine,
government
 as well. To sum up, according to my opinion, it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
a responsibility
 of both public and
government
. The
government
 should take higher penalties on unhealthy foods either
they
of them or themselves
their
them
 happy or not.

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