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In many countries, smoking is illegal in public places, many people believe that such a ban is justified. do your agree or disagree ?

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While some people believe that the law of complete ban on smoking at the public places is justified, others argue that it is not.
This
 essay totally agrees with the statement that,
this
 law is justified as it saves other visitors of public places from passive smoking and
also
 forces smokers to quit smoking for at least that period of time.
Firstly
, These people are not only causing harm to their own lungs, but are
also
 harming others by passive smoking.
In other words
, it is scientifically proven that, when a person stays in an area, where smoking is done,
this
 smoke penetrates into the lungs of surrounding people via inhalation and unknowingly they are
also
 affected by the detrimental effects of smoking.
For example
, a study conducted at the Stanford university found that, the lungs of the friends of the chain smokers were 10 percent more damaged than that of the actual smokers.
As a result
, the council has taken
this
 decision, so that
this
 will keep safe people who are not actually smoking.
Secondly
, it helps smokers to quit smoking.
That is
 to say, these people generally have misconception that, they cannot survive without smoking at the regular intervals, but when they visit these public facilities where they are not allowed to smoke, they any how try to resist their urge to do it and
this
 gives them the perspective that, they can live without it. To exemplify, one of my paternal uncles was addicted to the cigarettes and when he went to the pilgrimage, there he was not allowed to smoke for 40 days, today, he left it and he is delighted that he has made it. As a consequence,
this
 law acts as the ray of hope and motivates them that, they can be free from addiction. To conclude, the implementation of the ban on smoking at public facilities is a step in the right direction, as it will not only safeguard lungs of the surrounding audience, but it will
also
 encourage the smokers to quit
such
 a bad habit.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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