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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why this case? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays, much
agriculture
 improvement has been made.
Nevertheless
, many individuals around the globe don’t have access to those improvements leading to hungry and or starving occurrences.
Firstly
, many scientific research with
agriculture
 purpose begun whilst nations were experiencing an economical growth.
Hence
, farmers associated with governments became able to create a no stoping cycle of production,
such
 as, animal or vegetal.
On the other hand
, on account of
this
 economical and population development, more relevant became the differences between more and less developed countries. To put it simply, the latter nations are the ones without significant scientific research, as
agriculture
 advances.
Consequently
, those
population
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populations
 are
affected due the
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affected due to the
 lack of
agriculture
resources leading
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resources, leading
 to many starving and malnutrition followed by death. Equally, the same countries are the ones
more affected
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most affected
 by calamities,
such
 as, wars and global warming changes. The negligence and capitalism from
more wealthier
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wealthier
 countries, mostly located on the north hemisphere, are the reasons behind starvation and death around the world.
In other words
, the need to keep the
economical
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economy
 development lead to uneven growth’s and social
leves
a position on a scale of intensity or amount or quality
levels
lives
leaves
 between hemispheres.
Thus
, the solution for
this
 striking difference may be the introduction of several sustainable
agriculture
 practices in those countries.
Therefore
, those population’s will gain
agriculture
 knowledge and might be able to guarantee a continuous production and,
similarly
, small villages will become more independent from governments.
To
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In
 summary, a greater importance must be given to hungry cases and uneven economical situations.
Although
, direct financial help is a rapid solution, education and independence must be a long-term view.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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