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Stress related illness are becoming increasingly popular. Causes and solutions

#stress #illness
Stress
 has become a part and parcel of our lives. In today’s world more and more people are getting sick due to
stress
.
This
 essay will discuss the two main causes of
stress
 related illnesses
such
 as increasing
work
 pressure and health issues.
This
 essay
also
 suggests the s
work
-life balance and healthy lifestyle as solutions to
stress
 related illnesses. Some people are forced to
work
 longer hours these days in order to complete their
work
 in
time
. In
this
 competitive world, many people put themselves under unfavourable conditions which in turn results in mental pressure. Most people sit and
work
 on their computers for
longer
Suggestion
long
 hours in many corporate
settings which
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settings, which
 can lead to obesity and other health issues.
For instance
, many multinational companies utilize their employees and assign multiple projects which has to be sorted out in a comparatively limited
time
 frame.
Thus these
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Thus, these
 tensions
causes
Suggestion
cause
 physical and mental distress to their workers. Managing a good
work
 life balance and a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 can solve
majority
Suggestion
the majority
 of the above mentioned issues. Unbalanced
work
 schedule and skipping meals just to
work
 need to be changed.
people
Suggestion
People
 should understand that they need to take regular breaks to avoid fatigue and reduce working excessive hours in a stretch. At the same
time
, eating a healthy diet in a timely manner and regular exercise can be a practical solution for
stress
 related sickness.
For example
, spending more
time
 with family and friends and planning errands with them can be considerably refreshing.
Therefore
, in order to reduce job associated
stress
 one should have a balanced ratio of
work
, food, exercise, recreation and hobbies. In a nutshell, in today’s
busy world more
Suggestion
busy world, more
 people are getting unhealthy at an alarming rate due to
stress
.
This
 essay discussed that how
stress
 is caused by a high
work load
work that a person is expected to do in a specified time
workload
 and suggests effective remedies
such
 as
work
-life balance and healthy lifestyle
.
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stress-related illnesses
  • rapid pace
  • pressure
  • balance
  • omnipresent
  • information overload
  • disconnect
  • economic uncertainties
  • job insecurity
  • financial stress
  • environmental factors
  • chronic stress
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • mental health
  • support programs
  • physical activity
  • healthy eating habits
  • awareness
  • accessibility
  • counseling
  • stress management
  • community environment
  • reconnect with nature
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