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CHILDREN CAN LEARN EFFECTIVELY BY WATCHING TELEVISION. THEREFORE THEY SHOULD BE ENCOURAGED TO WATCH TV REGULARLY AT HOME AND AT SCHOOL.

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It is often considered that
television
 has a powerful impact on the young generation. Some people argue that their children can learn a lot of things efficiently from TV.
Thus
, they believe, encouraging children to watch
television
 on a daily basis, both at school and home is a good idea. I strongly agree with
this
 point of view, as I believe that
this
 kind of media can help a child to a great extent.
Firstly
, in today’s competitive world
television
 can dramatically enhance the intellectual level of a child. Being an auditory and visual media,
television
 can easily attract children and fine-tune (sharpen) their concentration which in turn helps them grow academically.
For instance
, children that have hyperactivity disorders with a low concentration span, can learn concepts in an interactive ways if they see and hear things at the same time.
Therefore
,
television
 can be an effective teaching tool if used productively.
Secondly
,
television
 can reduce the effort of a real teacher in making the students understand ideas in a creative way. Educational audios and videos take the role of a mentor very effectively in most of the cases. It is considered to be much more economical and an easier way to teach students if the overall student population is higher in an institution.
For example
, a student learning about botany might find a science documentary more interesting than reading from a text book.
However
, moderation of
television
 time for young children is key to avoid any long term harmful effects.
Moreover
 overuse can lead to a variety of health issues
such
 as vision impairments. To conclude,
television
 helps to enhance children’s knowledge and drastically reduce the workload of teachers in an academic setting. I share the opinion that children should be encouraged to watch
television
 productively.
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