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Communication is less between family members of late. Do you agree or disagree?

#communication #members
In recent years, according to some family members interact with each other less. In my opinion,
communication
 between family members increased way more than before.
This
 essay will shed some light on how mobile and
internet
 changed the
communication
 level.
Firstly
, for increase
communication
 is definitely because of easy access of mobile to everyone.
As a result
 of it anyone can connect with others at a drop of the hat. A Recent report says that husband and wife connect more frequently in a day through mobile, that might be by voice call or message. As Mobile is affordable and with data plan in less price, a wide range of family members able to communicate to each other. Even with unlimited call and text, duration of the talk
last
 more than expected. Which is a sign of healthy relation in the family. Another main reason, for good
communication
 between family members, is the world wide
internet
.The
internet
 has made the world a small village. People able connect to each other using various
internet
 tools like Skype, google
hang
Suggestion
hangs
 out. Even the video call chatting bring them closer, which is again free of cost.So more people use it happily every day to connect with their families.
For instance
, people who live in India connect with someone in the USA using the
internet
 call and talk for few hours free of cost. As it is free, It has been seen that lot of weekend people who live in abroad consume their time just talking to family members. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
due to affordability, mobile
communication
 becomes easier.
Also
 wide spread
internet
 and its heavy usage changed the world
.
Accept space
.
 These help the family members communicate more.
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