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You have had a class discussion on the importance of public libraries. Now your teacher has asked you to write a composition answering the following question: In the age of computers and the internet, is there still a need for public libraries? Write your composition.

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At the modern time do we still need libraries?
That is
 a relevant problem that should be observed. Let us discuss how it could be solved. On the one hand, there are a lot of people who believe that we are quite modern to refuse using paper units of information.
For example
, you could easily get any source of knowledge from any point of the Earth.
Moreover
, you could distinguish the exact data that you need without wasting your time on searching.
In addition
, you could translate foreign sources easily with the help of a translator.
On the other hand
, people are convinced that the books are a better option. They believe that the net makes people indifferent to the sources of information.
Furthermore
, people better learn when they search for clues by themselves. At the conclusion, I would rather have a lot of sources to investigate
instead
 of s
mall part
Suggestion
a small part
the small part
small parts
of i
nformation
Suggestion
the information
that I would know perfectly.
Also
 c
onvinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
is a big factor that makes me stay on the side of modern technologies.
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