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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Modern
culture people
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culture, people
 are extensively using
internet
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 to get whatever
information
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 they needed. Many people consider that
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 accessibility is essential for everyone to be
knowledgable but
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knowledgeable, but
knowledgeable but
 some others said that users would get distracted easily.
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 essay will address its importance for mankind. As everyone knows
information
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 is
wealth but
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wealth, but
 unwanted
information
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 would be a
distractive
causing destruction or much damage
destructive
 element for learners. If a student
choose
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chooses
Internet
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 for studying a
subject
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subject, then he
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 he is exposed to all relevant materials, but he would likely
gone
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go
 out of his way when he clicks on irrelevant
information
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. Recent survey unveils around two thousand young people had been
targetted
a reference point to shoot at
targeted
 by scammers
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 year as the victims explored unsafe websites. Without loosing concentration one can browse the
internet
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 and be safe online. During the younger age, it is far more practical to get out of concentration, independent of real world and
internet
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. It is
individual's ability
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an individual's ability
the individual's ability
 to be focused on what they are doing. Being safe online would need some tricks to eradicate scammers out of our way. If an individual learned to be safe and focused with what he/she really needed when
being
the act of buying
buying
 online
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 the
Internet
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 accessibility will give all the needed
information
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 to be
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
.
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 essay has discussed how
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internet
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the internet
 is essential for mankind to be
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
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Also it
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Also, it
is completely agree
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is completely agreed
 that all the
information
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 will be available and can serve people what they needed. Despite scammers and other negative
users
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user
 accessibility to the
internet
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 will never
disappointment
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disappoint
 its users. All we need to do is to learn to be safe on it.

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