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Question: An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online.

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Online shopping has gained more patronage following the wide appeal it seems to be getting from internet users. While
this
 phenomenon might be seen to offer some pleasant results, one cannot but exercise
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 measure of caution while carrying out online transactions. One of the major benefits of online shopping is that it offers a stress-free shopping activity as one does not have to get on the road to visit a ‘break and mortar’ store to carry out his shopping activity but would rather visit an online shopping platform to carry out his shopping. More so, an online shopper needs not to worry about walking back and forth, the aisles of a supermarket trying to tick off his shopping
list but
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list, but
instead
, he could visit the different categories on the online platform and select his chosen items by simply swiping or clicking on his browsing device.
On the other hand
, online shopping has
also
 recorded its downsides. It seems to be tales of woes for some online shoppers who have had
reasons
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reason
 to complain
of
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about
 their credit cards being cloned after making payments on some of these online platforms.
In addition
 to
this
 case of identity theft, some others include illegal exchange of goods and failed transactions. In
fact countless
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fact, countless
 cases of multiple deductions for a single online transaction have been reported at banks for resolving. In conclusion, while a huge volume in online shopping transactions could be seen as a measure of technological advancement for a developing country
such
 as ours and
thus
 be encouraged, adequate actions must be taken by regulatory agencies to ensure that those who would rather carry out their
shoppings
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shopping
 online can do so without having fears of failed or fraudulent transactions.
In addition
, shoppers should always conduct a background check on any platform they want to shop
from
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for
 before they eventually register their credit card details to forestall any cloning incident.
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