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Today, advertising plays a

crutial

of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis

crucial

part in every business. Many sports stars and

atheletes

a person trained to compete in sports

athletes

advertise various sport related products.

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, it might result in better sales of the

product

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, there are arguments that it can cause some

peoblems

a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved

problems

This

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essay examines both advantages and disadvantages of sports stars endorsing products.

To begin

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with, a

product

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endorsed by a famous sport person generates a lot of sales and

empolyment

the state of being employed or having a job

employment

opportunities. By watching their star in an advertisement, people may be

infulenced

a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc

influenced

to buy that

product

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, Virat Kholi are famous cricketer has started endorsing MRF cricket bats, which instantly boosted the sales of the company by 30%.

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sportpersons

Suggestion

sport persons

generally advertise the

product

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by playing their sport or by showing their skills.

This

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encourages the youth of today to have an active and

atheletic

relating to or befitting athletics or athletes

athletic

lifestyle similar to the person in

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the advertisement

. The influence of advertisements with a famous personality in it, is significantly higher when compared to normal adverts.

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leads to

children forcing

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children, forcing

their parents to buy them the desired

product

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For instance

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, a recent poll conducted by Time of India states that more than 45% of parents agreed to have

spending

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spent

10% more money due to sports equipment for their children.

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this

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, companies pay very huge amount to the celebrity for marketing their

product

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. They plan to

retrive

get or find back; recover the use of

retrieve

this

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amount by increasing the price of the

product

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therefore

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further

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rising

increasing in quantity or value

raising

the burden on parents to satisfy their loved one's desire. In conclusion, there are various benefits for companies to which

sportpersons

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advertise for.

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, there is

greater disadvantage

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a greater disadvantage

to parents due to

children forcing

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children, forcing

them to buy rather costly products, which are endorsed by the their favourite celebrity.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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