In recent years, people watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this? Should the government give financial support to local cinema to produce local films?

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is undoubtedly
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growing demand to watch more
movies
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from foreign countries over
against
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the
film
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that has been made in local countries. There are several reasons for
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preference and various measures can be taken by the
government
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to improve the tendency of people to watch local
films
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. It can be seen that the principal reason for
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situation is the advent of the Internet and
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the globalization
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of culture. In past, Children growing up, only had access to traditional
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that
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made in their home country. But in the Internet era, they not only
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to traditional and local
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, but they
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can watch worldwide
films
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. Owing to the intense special effects of
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international
movies
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, people mostly prefer Hollywood blockbusters
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a
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domestic cinema. The reason that international cinema is more popular and seems dominant to local one is financial. The budget
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allocated
Hollywood
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to Hollywood
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and Bollywood
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with home
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films
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an extreme monetary resource,
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as great studios and high technology equipment to make
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beyond our imagination and sales billion dollars
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box
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office. I personally believe that
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government
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the government
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ought to take action to persuade their residents to watch local
films
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. With regard to international movie preference,
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government
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the government
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can play its part by supporting local
film
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producers and
offer
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some facilities to them, in order to preserve domestic
films
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and encourage citizens to watch their
films
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.
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, promoting more
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videos
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on demanded websites would be an appropriate improvisation for developing national
movies
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.
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, these activities,
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not
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only preserve local culture, but would
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give chances to local producers to grow and become more experienced and talented. In conclusion, it is unquestionable that there is a comprehensive tent to watch foreign
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. Since Hollywood
have
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enriched
film
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studios and billions of dollars allocated to its
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industry.
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, the national
government
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could address
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significant expansion of international
movies
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, if they subsidized the local
films
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • easy access
  • foreign movies
  • international stories
  • perspectives
  • production quality
  • special effects
  • relatability
  • universality
  • subtitles
  • dubbing
  • social media
  • online streaming platforms
  • Hollywood
  • major film industries
  • cultural identity
  • job creation
  • economic growth
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