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More and more people are opting for ready-made food instead of freshly cooked food. Do this development have more advantages over disadvantages?

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An increasing number
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 of individuals favours more on the go meals rather than
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 prepared meals. I believe the benefit of
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 made meal is to ensure the nutritional quality of the
food
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 is at top notch. Admittedly, having
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 already prepared saves the hassle and stress of having to carry out meal prepping and
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 the subsequent preparation.
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meals
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meal
provide
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provides
quick fix
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a quick fix
quick fixes
 to satisfy hunger. A study of a group of young adults by some Yale
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a scientist who devotes himself to doing research
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researches
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 shows that quite a number of students rely on ready - made
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 because they do not have time to make
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 at
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 due to their various school schedules and
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outside the regular academic curriculum
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 activities.
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, the benefit of
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 made meals cannot be over emphasised.
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 is because one can control the content of the meal and ensure the nutritional value is at par. Nutritional component is necessary to ensure a healthy life as a healthy individual is made up of 70% healthy diet and 30% exercise. Of recent, there has been an increase in obesity and its related diseases
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 as high blood pressure and diabetes due to unhealthy eating habit and a major way to control
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 is linked to healthy diet which can only be achieved by cooking
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 at
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. In conclusion, despite the benefit of
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home cooked meal
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a home cooked meal
home cooked meals
, ready to eat
food
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 saves preparation time and money and free up time for other activities.

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