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Some people think that governments should ensure that their people stay healthy; others think it’s the responsibility of the individuals. Discuss both sides of the argument and provide your opinion.

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It has been argued by some people that the provision of health facilities is the prime responsibility of the state, whereas some have the opinion that it's the duty of the individual to remain healthy. In my opinion, I think that the government must ensure the availability of best medical setups. On the one hand, as health is a basic necessity of life, so ensuring it's upkeep, is the prime task of a ruler, and I
also
 support
this
 fact.
Firstly
, a healthy nation can progress exponentially.
Secondly
,
this
 prosperity is dependant on the allocation of budget in the field of medicine.
Moreover
, health department must provide hospital in each and every town along with the best advanced technologies.
This
, in turn, will not only keep the nation healthy but will
also
 increase the country's GDP by ensuring the availability of work force.
For instance
, according to a research published in the European journal, the USA has progressed due to its spending on the basic necessity projects like medicine and education.
On the other hand
, if a person wants to lead a peaceful life,
then
 he should take care of his hygiene himself. Primarily, he should keep the environment and surrounding clean.
Furthermore
, he should not only do regular exercise, but should
also
 consume a balanced diet. All
this
 will keep him fit and will increase the working capability. So, individual effort is must, to remain disease free.
For example
, the Japanese nation has inculcated
this
 habit of self uplift and has emerged as a powerful country. To conclude, I believe that, every individual has the right to avail the free medical facility and its provision is the utmost task of the ruling party.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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