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buying things on the internet, such books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
It has become a fashion, now a day, that people buy products online,
instead
 of going and buying them from shops, which I personally think is a bad call.
Firstly
, I would like to put a light on a the
quality
 of products we get from shopping online. It means that, when you buy anything online, its
quality
 sometimes differs from, what it is shown.
For example
, when I bought a VR box from amazon, when it reached home, it was broken from one side and I could not see through it properly.
Also
, it had many flaws in it. So, one should get a
quality
 product, when they buy anything from online.
Secondly
, but most importantly is, the fake or wrong products, we get from online.
That is
, we get 1st copy or sometimes something else of what we have asked for. Means,
instead
 of black dress you get a white dress. For an instant, my friend asked for Samson A30s mobile. But, in place of that, the company sends him A30 model, which is different from actual model in specification and looks.
Hence
, online shopping, sometimes waste your
time
 as well as money by sending wrong products.
Next
 is, many times, the products, which we want on a particular
time
, do not reach at the same
time
. It is seen that, items which are promised on
time
, reach late. Few times, even after the occasion.
For example
, a guy purchasing gift for someones birthday, receives it after his or her birthday. It is actually very frustrating to get
such
 kind of treatment when you have promised it. To conclude
this
, I must say that, online buying is a risky thing, because one might get fake or wrong as well as bad
quality
 product.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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