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Some people think that tourists should follow the traditional customs of the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued that every country has its own cultural shades and the people visiting them must follow these native rules. In my opinion, I fully agree with
this
 belief, as it helps the travellers to not only learn new traditions, but will
also
 help them to intermingle with the locals.
Firstly
, one of the aim of tourism is to get information about the unique customs of different nations of the world. There is a famous saying that ''while in Rome, do as the Romans do". So, it's a moral obligation of everyone to follow the rules and regulations of the visited places.
Similarly
,
this
 practice will
also
 help them to avoid any untoward incident.
Moreover
, the canvas of tourists will acquire new traditional rituals which will, ultimately, help them to survive in an alien world.
For instance
, the Europeans are fond of travelling and are famous for their law abiding habits.
Secondly
, people make new relationships with the locals by following their culture.
This
, on the one hand, brings different nations closer, whereas
on the other hand
, increases the trade and family bondages.
Furthermore
, it will not only enhance the horizon of individuals, but will
also
 bring peace and prosperity in the world.
As a result
 of increasing family ties, ethnic diversity of the globe enhances making the genetic pool more complex and diverse.
For example
, according to a research published in a British journal, the population of the United States of America is from different ethnic background, making it more deep rooted and strong. To conclude, I think that the relationship among different tribes is increasing day by day, because of their respect for each others values and inculcating them their own walk of life.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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