Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisement tell us about new product that may improve our lives. Which view do you agree or disagree?

Adverting products and services can be divided into ones that are useless for us and
ones
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the ones
that are very useful. I believe that
although
advertising can encourage us to purchase things that are not necessary, overall it is beneficial. A negative side of advertising is that people are encouraged to buy expensive things that they do not need. One thing is
jewelry
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
and
this
is the result of mass advertising.
For example
, every day when watching TV, listening to the radio or reading the paper, many adverts can be seen about getting an expensive ring, chain, necklace or
ear-rings
jewelry to ornament the ear; usually clipped to the earlobe or fastened through a hole in the lobe
earrings
. From my point of
view these
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view, these
kinds of advertising contaminate people's minds. In
this
case you are encouraged to buy things you do not really need. They make you believe you need
such
products in order to succeed or be happy.
However
, there are
also
benefits of advertising.
For example
, advertisements of the new detergents with up-to-date formulas to help you maintain your clothes in a perfect condition, the new cars with some extra features that make your
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
more comfortable and sports goods that make your life healthier may help you to improve your life.
In addition
, it can
also
help you to find out about things you would
otherwise
miss.
For example
, my husband and I saw an advert on the Internet about a very interesting and inexpensive vacation to Japan for a week. We like
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
, so now we are planning to find out more about it and,
may be
by chance
maybe
, make reservations. I believe that without
advertisements we
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advertisements, we
would be unaware about many opportunities that may make your life happier, easier and less stressful. To conclude, every person has his own scale of values, but in my personal opinion the benefits of advertising outweigh the drawbacks.

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