More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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Nowadays,
transportation
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is one of our modern life problems,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
when people depend on their own cars.
This
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assay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
will discuss the problems of
car
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transpiration and some possible solutions.
Firstly
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, the most obvious problem of depending on private
car
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is the traffic jam.
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, old city like Damascus, it is very hard to go its downtown
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with
your
car
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as
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city is very crowded with the old streets, markets and poor places for parking.
As a result
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, movement of people will be restricted and
suffering especially
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suffering, especially
during an
emergency
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emergency, such
such
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as a dangers
car
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accident or a sick patient in an ambulance where they should be transferred urgently.
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, one of the
serous
concerned with work or important matters rather than play or trivialities
serious
effect of
car
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transportation
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is pollution. To illustrate, the capital of Iran,
Tahran
the capital and largest city of Iran; located in northern Iran
Tehran
, is one of the most cities which has very high pollution since it is very big, crowded, and industrial city.
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to the bad traffic jam and its
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
,
Tahran
the capital and largest city of Iran; located in northern Iran
Tehran
has
high level
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a high level
high levels
of carbon dioxide and
consequently
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high records of lung cancer and chronic lung disease.
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, government and individuals must play a role to solve
this
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issue.
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the government can develop the facilities of the cities by creating new and wide streets and underground parking.
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Thus it
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Thus, it
can increase public
transportation
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like bus and trains and encourage people to use it by making them more accessible and cheap.
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Also people
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Also, people
can help solving
this
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problem by using public
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transportation
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transport
rather than their own cars in order to reduce the traffic jam and the environmental pollution. To conclude, depending on private cars make many problems but government and individuals has the role to do the solutions by development of new way to help people movement in the future

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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