Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?

It has been observed that
alot
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a lot
of issues
such
as global warming have been created from the modernization in many countries.
This
essay would be discussing the dangers of global warming and ways to reduce these hazards. One of the major hazards caused by global warming is air pollution.
This
can be found in almost all our environment
such
as fuel combustion from vehicles and
burning
Suggestion
the burning
of
gabbages
food that is discarded (as from a kitchen)
garbage
.
Although
it may seem ideal to drive a car without noticing
this
carbondioxide
Suggestion
carbon dioxide
it releases or the gases from burning
gabbages
food that is discarded (as from a kitchen)
garbage
with the intention of keeping the area clean. It is
stil
with reference to action or condition; without change, interruption, or cessation
still
harmful to the body most especially the human lungs.
Furthermore
, deforestation is another factor to review as it causes an increase in the temperature.
Thus
making both the air and
earth
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earth's
surface very hot. To reduce
this
jeopardy from global warming, government and should place
strick
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Strick
strict
strikes
law which
include
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includes
vehicle owners should use
catalyst
Suggestion
a catalyst
that makes fuel combustion complete and
odorless
having no odor
odourless
.
Also
,
gabbages
food that is discarded (as from a kitchen)
garbage
and dry leaves should be properly disposed or recycled
instead
of burning them.
Hence
, when these are
done it
Accept comma addition
done, it
would eradicate the excess
carbondioxide
Suggestion
carbon dioxide
in the air.
In addition
, cutting down of trees should be prohibited as these vegetations help to reduce the atmospheric temperature. In conclusion, with
this
stated
points
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point
, global warming can be reduced to a commendable rate. And a more healthy life for humans can be achieved as well
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