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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Language
 constraint is often a problem for people residing in
foreign land
Suggestion
a foreign land
foreign lands
. There are some people who believe
language
 barriers can cause severe social and practical problems. In my opinion, unlike social problems, which are complex issues to tackle, practical problems are easily manageable. The major problem when people migrate in a foreign land is the racism that comes towards them.
This
 is because people have a tendency to show apathy for anything that doesn’t identify with their own origins.
For example
, despite being a part of the same country, people of
Terai region
Suggestion
the Terai region
 of Nepal who migrate to Hilly region often feel alienated because of
language
 and cultural differences. They lack proper
language
 mastery to co-operate on social activities and native people denigrate them because of
this
 reason.
On the other hand
, to get through mundane life, one doesn’t need to be a virtuoso of foreign
language
. While mastering a
language
 requires a lot of patience and effort, getting a grasp of the basic syntax is not as challenging. Within a day or two, people can develop
language
 proficiency satisfactory enough to buy daily food and stuffs.
Also
, with the burgeoning of technology,
language
 gap has reduced significantly.
For instance
, apps like google translate enable conversion of sentences from one
language
 to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 effortlessly.
Hence
, people are less likely to face practical problems as they used to before. To sum up, while social problems
such
 as racism and discrimination still prevail because of
language
 differences, managing practical aspects of life in a foreign
language
 is relatively simple due to easy learning curve of basic syntax and advancing technology.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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