People should look after their health for personal benefits, rather than a duty for a society. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that the
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that people should look after their
health
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for personal
benefi
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
,
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rather than a duty for a society. In my opinion
opinon
first or beginning
opening
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
completely agree with
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view for several reasons.  The main reason why
I i believe that
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I believe that
I I believe that
people should take care of their
health
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for personal benefits is because people who have good
health
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can work productively. In
fact
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, these people build a healthy
lifestyles
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lifestyle
and have
posivitive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
thingking
the process of using your mind to consider something carefully
thinking
.
This
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means that they could earn the large sums of money, so they may be saving up for a long time or buy what they like.
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, reports show that officers usually go the gyms to where they can keep fit and boost their immune system, their salary is higher than the other.  Another reason why
I i hold
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I hold this
I I hold this
this
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view is that a
country
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where the rate of people dying from
disease
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the disease
not
high
objective male pronoun, used to refer to a male human or animal
he
is a developed
country
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. In
fact
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, a number of sick people
is easily fail
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are easy failing
are easily failing
easily fail
have easily failed
to make ends meet because they do not have enough
health
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to work.
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mean
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means
that the government of those countries
not need
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doesn't need
to spend a lot of money, which can help patients receive treatments.
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, the
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that
Sweden where
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Sweden, where
there is the rate of people suffer from cancer is lowest in the world results in a
country
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of happiness  In conclusion, I
strong
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strongly
believe that people take care of their
health
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instead
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of a duty for a society because the working
productive
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productivity
productions
of people with good
health
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and a
country
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where people are less sick is developing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • duty
  • well-being
  • burden
  • healthcare systems
  • productive
  • economy
  • example
  • empower
  • informed choices
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