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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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The migration of people from one
country
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 to another has a significant effect on our society's culture. In my opinion, the reasons behind more and more people immigrating to other countries are a better quality of life and good career opportunities.
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, it can
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 produce some drawbacks.
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, people from developing countries move towards the more developed states in order to enjoy high standards of living and to learn about the
country
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's culture, language and enjoy an optimum level of personal satisfaction.
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, developing countries may still be struggling with poor infrastructure and
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 operations of the government.
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, to cope with that, people might decide to start their life from zero in another more advanced
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 and adapt to the social culture.
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, a career plays a very vital role in surviving in
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 competitive world.
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, people may find excellent career prospects in another
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 as
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compared
 to their own,
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 they
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 like to pursue the relevant and most rewarding job options in developed countries.
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, exceeding migration can create some
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 events
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in
 the host countries. It can easily cause overpopulation in the countries which are preferred by a
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 number of outsiders.
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, competition for getting a suitable job will increase and ultimately it will lead to unemployment. To smother with these negative effects of immigration, the government could imply strict rules in terms of issuing a visa or even citizenship to the immigrants. To conclude, immigration can produce both positive as well as negative effects on the
country
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's social welfare, and democratic environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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