some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Although
there is no doubt, that films are
source
Suggestion
a source
of entertainment, it is important to consider which medium of watching is more enjoyable. While some people believe that watching movie on mobile is more comfortable and saves money, I support the view that going to
cinema
Suggestion
the cinema
has more moments of enjoyment and there is a no disturbance. Those who advocate seeing
movings
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
moves
moving
online may argue that
this
saves money and its
enviornment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
efficient
Suggestion
efficiently
.
For example
, fuel cost is saved because there is not travelling and as there is no travelling there is possibility of pollution. The benefit of
this
also
includes
that is
easy to pause and play, one does not have watch the unnecessary part.
As a result
, more money
could be save
Suggestion
could be saved
and could be utilised for something better.
However
, I would
agrue
present reasons and arguments
argue
agree
that above way of entertainment is to much arduous and boring, an old school process of viewing movies in cinema is more fun. The latter type has less disturbance and has the perfect ambience to enjoy the 70MM creativity of the director. For
instances
Suggestion
instance
, under
this
type, we can listen and feel the motions of the pictures with the help of advance technological speakers and the 4 D technology. If,
instead
, only movies would be watched on handsets than whole purpose of the moving making will be lost. In conclusion, while seeing films on laptops might be more cost-effective and efficient, a process of imagination becomes reality of someone's art is in my view, paramount.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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