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In some countries young people are encouraged to work r travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In some countries,
however
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, young people are encouraged to have a job
Use synonyms
r
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
or
travel
Suggestion
travelling
 for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do
this
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. In some countries young people are encouraged to
drive
Suggestion
drive or
driver
drive are
r
Use synonyms
 go for a duration between finishing high academy and starting academy studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do
this
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. In some countries young people are encouraged to
pursue
Suggestion
pursue
pursuer
r
Use synonyms
 move for a time between finishing high college and starting
departament
a specialized division of a large organization
department
 studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do
this
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. In some countries young people are encouraged to toil
r
Use synonyms
walk
Suggestion
walking
,
for example
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, for a period between finishing high institution and starting alma mater studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do
this
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. In some countries young people are encouraged to try
Use synonyms
r
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
are are
or
wander
Suggestion
wandering
 for a term between finishing high
institutiture
Suggestion
 and starting halls of knowledge studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do
this
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.In some countries young people are encouraged to work
Use synonyms
r
introduces an alternative
or
are
are are
 travel for a year between finishing high
dergree
a position on a scale of intensity or amount or quality
degree
 and starting high studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do
this
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. To sum up, in some countries young people are encouraged to
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
r
Use synonyms
migrate
Suggestion
migrating
 for a piece
between
Suggestion
Between
 finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do
this
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. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do
this
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.

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