IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Nowadays many people choose to be self-emplpyed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

#people #work #company #organisation #be #case
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In our modern society, more and more people choose to
work
 individually and start their own new business.
This
 phenomenon is mainly due to the
stress
 people often struggle at the office and peer pressures they face in companies that they will have less when they
work
 as self-employed.
However
, there are some drawbacks to set up their own operation too,
such
 as financial
management
.
To begin
 with, people tend to feel
stress
 and pressure when they
work
 with their colleagues in an office. In fact, the
work
 environment is not always appropriate for employees to perform well. Peer pressures,
for example
, can give
further
 unnecessary
stress
 for workers because a lot of people tend to compete with their coworkers. Another example is the way bosses treat their subordinates at
work
 place
that is
 not always logical or understanding.
Additionally
, many people in our sophisticated society are more talented and creative enough to start up their own business using their own knowledges and skills. Computer literacy,
for instance
, often help the self-employers start new jobs, since the computer skills are highly evaluated in the society.
However
, being a self-employed
also
 has some downsides as well. Financial
management
 skills are one of the concerns.
Although
 many people are more sophisticated enough to start their own company, they often lack the knowledge of how to manage the budget. Taxing system is the most difficult one and need a professional intervention from lawyers to avoid illegal actions or
management
.
Similarly
, more responsibilities can discourage self-employers too. They are supposed to take all responsibilities themselves in the absence of their bosses or superiors that will be a lot of
work
 when some issues arise. In short, self-employed workers start their own company to avoid more
stress
 or pressures from people around them at workplaces.
However
, they will have to take challenges to learn better financial
management
 skills into an account before starting a new company.
Submitted by Erina on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
What to do next:
Look at other essays: