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Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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It is often thought by some that it is better to run a self governed
business
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 than becoming an employee of any other corporation. In my opinion, I consider that the benefits of running
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business including
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a business, including
a business including
businesses including
the business including
 control on
generated
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generating
 profits and daily activities definitely
outweighs
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outweigh
 the drawbacks of
this
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 phenomenon.
Admitidely
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Admittedly
, there are some minor negative aspects of being self employed.
Firstly
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, stress free working atmosphere lacks for the owner of a
business
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.
In other words
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,
individual
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an individual
the individual
 always keeps thinking about income, profits, expenditures and payment of the taxes
.
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 They only depend upon their wages and bonuses written in their job contract.
Secondly
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, there are no chances of promotion according to age and experience.
For instance
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, many companies promote normal workers to the managerial level after serving for certain years in the same capacity, which is not the case in
runing
(American football) a play in which a player attempts to carry the ball through or past the opposing team
running
 a
business
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.
Therefore
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, it gives an overall view that being employed in
organization
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an organization
the organization
 is better for those who want to live a relaxed life. Despite the certain disadvantages discussed above, I strongly believe that
free lancing
work independently and on temporary contracts rather than for a long-term employer
freelancing
 is the best way of earning because all profits of the
business
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 activity only belongs to
owner
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the owner
. It not only provides contentment, but
also
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 gives an opportunity to expand corporation. Another main benefit is that individuals fully control their daily activities. They do not have to follow rules and regulations made by others. A huge success of
facebook
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Facebook
 is a great example of
advantages
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the advantages
 of owning a
business
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.
Thus
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, it is completely clear that having a company is a great way of achieving success in life. In conclusion,
although
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 there are certain drawbacks of starting and controlling a
business
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, I think that positive aspects of
this
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 situation outweighs its negatives.
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