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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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With the advent of technology and advancement in our ability to communicate worldwide, the tourism industry has seen a boost, overall. Tourism has a different meaning for everyone, individually. Some go out to explore the art, architecture, culture and traditions. Some are mesmerized by the beauty of Mother Nature. And, the list goes on. As a tourist and explorer of different cultures myself, I believe it depends all upon the people of the host country, how they want their cultures to be represented. And, since I have mostly seen people being immensely warm and amiable, I would disagree strongly with the mentioned statement. Coming from different cultures, we all have our uniqueness;
that is
 what makes us “different”. And, people who travel and explore other countries, are generally very much aware of
this
 fact. Seeing the differences from a distance on TV or social media, makes things supremely prejudiced.
However
, being in the country, around the people and living in their shoes, makes one actually see why they have certain principles or ways.
This
, of course, rather than creating tensions, creates understanding. It creates a sense of coexisting. So, with the boost in international tourism, people have started seeing
world
Suggestion
the world
 from a gentler angle.
However
, every person is a representative of his country and his own culture. It is right in their hands to either make someone’s experience so good that they want to come back. Or, so bad that makes them want to agree with the above statement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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