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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Over the
last
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 few years sending old parents to an old-age
facilities
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facility
 has become a trend. It is a nasty fact that most children are apprehensive to cater for their elderly family member. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the benefits of
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 situation and discuss some side effected associated with
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 trend. Many people send their family member to a care home so that they can be looked after properly, as in
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 fast moving life everyone is working and there would be
no body
a person of no influence
nobody
 at home to take care of them,
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, most of the children prefer to send them to
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an
 old age home which is fully equipped to handle their medical needs and have more people like them in it.
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 way the aged people get companionship and medicinal assistances as and when they require it.
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, young family can free and
relaxingly
affording physical or mental rest
relaxing
 work and the elderly are professionally
assited
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 and spending time with their friends. In these facilities, elderly sometimes miss their family members. It has been evident that most of the children leave their parents at these places and do not come to visit.
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 scenario often makes them depressed and they become prone to committing suicide.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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