Nowadays, some parents pressure their children to be successful in a specific field. Is it a positive or negative development?

It is believed that parents can contribute to

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of a female

her

children's success.

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, some of them give their children too much pressure. Some parents strongly insist that they can change their children's future

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In my opinion, both views contain reasonable reasons which are worth mentioning. In proportion to the amount of efforts made by their parents, children have more potential to become successful in the future. Most most of all kids tend to be neglectful about their studying or developing their talent.

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,

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refers to the speaker or writer

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(sometimes followed by 'to') applying to or characterized by or distinguishing something particular or special or unique

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n specific

areas like sports need

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a lot

of support from their parents.

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, Yuna Kim, one of the most famous ice

skater

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skaters

in Korea was always accompanied by her mother. When she received

gold medal

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a gold medal

the gold medal

in the Olympic, she mentioned all her success is attributed by her parents. There is another apparent evidence which supports my point of view. From the survey, more than 70% of talented

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someone who plays a musical instrument (as a profession)

musicians

and sports man are usually directed by their parents in their early age. It implies that to develop

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definite article

the

skills which are primarily in art and sports area, it is

indespensable

not to be dispensed with; essential

indispensable

for parents to give their children the positive pressure to lead their children. Putting all things into consideration, children can feel stressed when their parents keep requiring them to enhance their abilities.

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however

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However

, most of all geniuses are nurtured and directed

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Used in specifying adjacent dimensions

by

why

my

their parents.

if

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If

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a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian

parents

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can direct their children with

appropriate amount

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the appropriate amount

an appropriate amount

of pressure, they will be able to improve their skills highly

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interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class

which

will lead them to their ultimate goals.